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Big MAd drongo wrote:
> 
> Bluemage wrote in message
> >Anyway, since I've hit a bit of a snag, and posting fiction of various
> >sorts seems to be in right now, figured I'd post the first bit of my
> >"Victorian" story with aliens and stuff in it, this is still fairly
> >rough and not even close to complete, so :)
> <claps>
> 
> >Be gentle!
> <pushes Bluemage gently into the padded room before getting the
> nitpicker out>
> 
> >Shortly, with an exclamation from the driver, it pulled to a stop
> outside at the >side of the road.
> Outside of what?
> 

Umm...good question.  Heh :)

> >The cabbie clambered down from his seat, splashing through a puddle at
> the
> >curb, to open the door.
> I am unsure as to whether a puddle would be at the curb as much as under
> it on next to it?

Well, it's just a cobblestone curb.  Heh.

> 
> >The first to disembark was a quite respectable gentleman, Mr. Hendrick
> >Feddleson the Fourth, the drizzle beading on his top hat and looking
> >quite uncomfortable to be out in such weather at such an hour.
> The phrasing suggests that the drizzle is uncomftable to be out, is this
> so?

Well, to such a "distinguished gentleman," of course it is.  And it's
late at night too, so.  Heh.

> 
> >The reason for their host's breach of etiquette was self-evident upon
> >reaching the drawing room.  Their host, Thomas Ashley, was being faced
> >down by a quite irate housekeeper.
> In my opinion, you have overused host here, doesn't sit quite right in
> my mind.

I'll look at it.

> 
> >Her rant quite disrupted by the interruptions, ingrained habits and
> >propriety took over, and Mrs. Matthews curtseyed.  "Of course."
> Would a boarding house housekeeper curtesy to a guest?
> 

I dunno.  You know any? :)

> >Thomas chuckled and rubbed his chin, straightening.  "I doubt I will be
> >having any trouble with believing it, I know of your riding boots and
> >your accuracy."
> Sorry? Lost me totally.
> 

Yeah, need to rephrase that.  How exactly would he go about saying if
he's annoying, she'd kick him in the balls? :)

> >and who is your other visitor, I confess I don't recognize him."
> What other visitor?
> And would any gentleman talk in such a rude manner?
> 

The other guy, sitting in the other seat.  Heh.  Gotta stop writing late
at night like that.  And I dunno, know any gentlemen? :)

> >Thomas turned, standing in front of the table, upon which rested a
> >shape under a red velvet blanket.  "To take your questions out of
> order,
> >this is Dr. Smith, of the Royal University, a professor of Biology."
> Where?  The shape under the red blanket?
> 

See above :P

> >an acquaintance who knew of my interest in natural oddities.
> He'd fit right in here then :o)
> 
> >Its eyes resembled those of an insect, large and lacking a pupil,
> Are Sectoid eyes segmented then?  Can't remember to be honest :o)

No, they're smooth, just couldn't figure a better thing to describe it
as.  And it's not a Sectoid, it's just a "grey" :)

- Bluemage, who really needs to go read the Sherlock Holmes stuff.